Title: When Love Hurts.
Author: Aderonke Moyinlorun
Release Date: September 28, 2013
Genre: Romance suspense
Tamara Price’s world is about to tumble down around her and the one responsible for it is none other than Raymond Brock, her ex-boyfriend. She hasn’t seen him in one year after he ran off to Paris and married her best friend.
Tamara is smart, intelligent, single and a divorce attorney. When Raymond asks her to be his divorce attorney, they rediscover a passion that never died and the lies that kept them apart. Only one problem exists- Tamara is better at fixing broken marriages than she is at dissolving them. Can Raymond and Tamara find a way to overcome the obstacle of his wife- short of murder, that is?
Aderonke is a self-published author who founded Adom Publishers at the age of 22. She appeared on several bestseller lists, amazon kindle being one of them.
Much of her works revolves around ordinary women who face seemingly insuperable challenges, but find their heart's desire through unflinching determination. Compassionate and lively, and with future projects in the making, Aderonke is a woman with vision as she continues to blaze trails and inspire others around her.
She presently tours the country speaking about how to follow your dreams starting from a young age as well as encouraging other aspiring writers. A graduate of Obafemi Awolowo University, Nigeria, she is presently studying for a second degree at Indiana State University. She is presently living in Indianapolis, Indiana and working on her next novel, That Night (When Love Hurts, #3).
Show, don’t tell
“Show, don’t tell” is one of the longstanding rules in fiction that is very hard to explain to
beginning writers, and even harder for experienced writers to practice.
Yet, it’s simple and easy. Don’t spend page upon page telling readers your main character is
loving, caring, kind, polite, and so on.
Show him loving someone. It’s as simple as him telling someone, “I love you.”
Show him being kind. It’s as simple as him holding the door for someone.
Show him being polite. It’s as simple as him saying, “Please” and “Thank you.”
Often, you’re tempted to write unnecessary details and long passages telling the readers what
you’re thinking in relation to a character or what you want them to know. It’s not good for
Simply show it to them and trust your readers to see what you want them to see.
Will all readers see what you want them to see? No, but most will.
In my last book, When Love Hurts, my main character is a divorce attorney who, due to all the
heartbreaks she’s had in her life, decides to help save marriages, which she does so well, until
she messed up and fell in love with her client’s husband. Despite the fact that I wrote an angry
client saying, “We paid her to save our marriages, but she…” a reader still asked me how she
gets money if she saves people’s marriages rather than filing for divorce.
Did this reader skip that part? Did the reader not understand that she was getting paid to save
people’s marriage? After all, in reality, marriage counselors get paid. Or maybe I should have
specifically wrote it out that, Hey, she saves marriages, but gets paid this certain amount to do
it, instead of having a client get angry and say, “I paid you, but you didn’t do what I asked you to
If I had to write that book again, I’d write it the same way. I still wouldn’t tell my readers she
gets paid. Instead, I’ll show them the angry client.
What I’m trying to say is – when it comes down to it, we writers have to learn to trust readers to
see the details we leave out. Our readers are smart, and there is no reason to spell everything
out to them.